Wow. Man, where do I begin?

The intent of this piece seems to have been to tell a story of a troubled relationship, with the narrator seeming to be decidedly unreliable -- what is the truth, and what is the fiction? It's a common aspect of relationships and breakups, to varying extremes of course, but nevertheless it's an endlessly fascinating one. In this regard, the poem knocks the ball out of the park. We see what could be the narrator's own inability to handle serious relationships due to various emotional issues, but we are also shown that narrator might not be the one entirely at fault. Whichever it is, or any combination of those, it's a fantastic premise, and you've done it right.

As for 'originality', there's not exactly much room to be outright plagiarizing, nor entirely unique. This is a tale of a common human condtion. I think the distinguishing factor here is that you presented it in such a way as to accentuate the fact that there's a two sidedness in this, and in human behavior in general, which is something you don't see everyday.

The structure of the poem is presented in a frantic, dizzying, almost disorienting way. When I first scanned through it, I was confused as to why there were words on the right, which made me intrigued, though admittedly very slightly irritated. However, after reading through it, the structure fits the piece perfectly. That very same feeling of confusion is what is meant to be conveyed. You aren't supposed to know which side is the true story, and mayhap it's not just one side -- maybe there's truth in both. To me, it gives a sense of the despair and denial of the narrator, and it delivers it perfectly.

In regards to the impact, let me just say that this made me inspired enough to read it several times over, sit and think for a good 15 minutes, then write a full Critique, which is not something I often do. I absolutely love works that explore the complexities and fallacies of human nature, and defy the black/white, right/wrong, true/false mentality that many people have about things. This left me satisfied, and, at the same time, craving more of your work.

All in all, this is an absolutely gorgeous piece. You had the idea, and whether it came from your own experience or from the wells of your imagination, or both, that idea was a very deep and evocative one. You gave it your voice, your own spin, and you told the tale in a way that accentuated the point, and actually made me feel the confusion and frustration these situations can bring, simply by structuring it in a different way than is expected with poems. Through all this, you moved me, and inspired me to think deeply and creatively, which is, in my opinion, both the very definition, and the greatest achievement, of art.